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Karina Fabian's avatar

"atypically woo-woo" should be a technical term!

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Thomas Salerno's avatar

It should!! :)

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Father Roderick's avatar

Great start, intrigued already! I like the combination of a military setting and an ancient site. Quite a bit of foreboding already. And the ambiguity of the dizziness: is it due to her medical issues, or is there something else going on...

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Thomas Salerno's avatar

So glad you enjoyed this! Yes, I had fun playing with the contrast between down-to-earth military characters and spooky paranormal events. And I love working those ambiguous moments into my stories: was that a "normal" headache or was Metzger experiencing a kind of sixth sense overload? I want the readers to judge that for themselves. But I do work in some more clues later.

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Kyle Metz's avatar

Something about the name "Metzger" sounds good to me... can't quite put my finger on it...

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JM Kraemer/Lego Church Project's avatar

Very fun read so far.

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Evan Staehle's avatar

Great job with this Thomas! I’m intrigued

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Thomas Salerno's avatar

Thank you so much!

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Dominic de Souza's avatar

this is very fun :) I'm getting hints that someone has done their Graham Hancock homework? It promises to be fun!

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S. L. Linton's avatar

Oh, I love it. I can't wait to read more!

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Thomas Salerno's avatar

Thank you!! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

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